Původní text:
A fisher and a fish
One fisher went on fishes and he caught very big the fish. He went past the forest to home and saw a call-box. He wanted call to home. He opened the door of the call-box and went in inside with the fish. He called to home. Because the fish was very big and the call-box was very small, so the call-box broke. The fisher cut by glass and he injure to hands. He wanted call for help, but he was injured very much. He bled until died. The fish died too, because the fish didn’t have a water.
Opravený text:
A fisher and a fish
One fisher (1) went on fishes and he caught (2) very big the fish. He (3) went past the forest to home and saw a call-box. He (4) wanted call to home. He opened the door of the call-box and went in inside with the fish. He called to home. Because the fish was very big and the call-box was very small, so the call-box broke. (5) The fisher cut by glass and he injure to hands. (6) He wanted call for help, but he was injured very (7) much. (8) He bled until died. The fish died too, because the fish didn’t have (9) a water.
- … went fishing – podobně jako “go skiing, go swimming, go shopping”
- … a very big fish – ryba je zmíněna poprvé, je jednotná a počitatelná, tudíž použijeme člen neurčitý “a” Který patří na samý začátek rozvíjeného výrazu.
- When he was going home, he saw a phone-box. Dlouhá akce “going home” byla přerušena jednou krátkou, spatřením budky “he saw a phone-box” Správně použitý člen “a phone-box” viz (2).
- Wanted TO call… Slovesa vůle a chtění se spojují ostatními slovesy pomocí “to” would like to go, wish to go, decided to go…
- The fisherman was cut by the glass and his hands were injured. Jedna z možností. Trpný rod zdůrazňuje, že se to nestalo rybářovou vinou.
- … wanted to call, viz (4)
- Možná lépe “very badly.”
- “He bled till he died” je v zásadě použitelné. Lépe by znělo “He bled to death.”
- … any water. Voda je nepočitatelná a jako taková nemá člen neurčitý.